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Marsbert
11-30-04, 09:12AM
Here's our last short story for Creative Writing. It's due in about an hour so I just wanted to post it here to see what you guys think. Wish me luck during workshop with the three insane boys in my group! :p :winkkiss:

A Cozy Catnip Cottage

Maggie Jameson couldn’t help herself, she loved cats. She loved their eyes, their meows, and the way they could take care of themselves. That’s why she had so many of them in the house she once shared with just her husband and kids. Now that the kids had moved out, and her husband had been put in the ground a long time ago, the cats were her family, all 15 of them.
Maggie sat on her back porch as usual, watching Mr. Bojangles and Tiffy sniff a very attractive bit of grass, when one of the numerous large, nasty dogs next door stood upon his hind legs and gawked at them.
“Go away!” she scolded the smiling puppy. He ignored her, as it was much more interesting to watch her babies. When Maxwell the orange tiger, who had been near the dog, scurried away to save his ear drums, the irritating pup began barking relentlessly. Maggie waddled over, afraid he might jump the barricade, and bopped the big pup on his nose. The fence reverberated when he launched off of it to get away from her, whining and yelping.
“Hey!” Her younger neighbor, Rufus Major, yelled as she saw him charging at her. His neck and face were turning the shade of a fire hydrant. “Lady, how many time have I told you my dogs ain’t hurting your stupid cats!”
“Don’t you take that tone with me, he wouldn’t leave us alone.”
“He wouldn’t ‘a done nothing, he can’t get over the fence you stupid wench.”
“There’s no need for name calling Mr. Major.” Maggie huffed and spun on her heel. When she returned to the porch, the Siamese Janice purred against her shin. She scooped up the small feline and brought her inside to the kitchen counter. Soon Mopsy and her sister Flopsy had appeared near Janice on the counter, all very interested in the slices of ham that Maggie was making a sandwich with. “It’s not like he needs to have so many of those dirty things.” She said to them, “They’re all so loud and obnoxious.”
After a few minutes of enjoying her sandwich back on the porch, she realized her lap was still bare. “Baby?” she looked around. Baby would always pop up onto her lap when she had a sandwich on the porch. Maggie scanned the backyard, but didn’t see her little “mini cow”. She went inside and called Baby’s name, checked all the rooms, got down on her knees to peek under the bed, but she didn’t see Baby anywhere.
She went back to the porch, wringing her hands. She looked out into the backyard once again, hoping Baby might have turned up, but she was disappointed yet again. Maggie glanced over at Rufus’ yard, then quickly shied away. She took a deep gulp of her pride, then stomped back to the fence where she had seen him earlier.
“Rufus!” she called, trying not to sound too upset.
Rufus was on the opposite side of his yard, weeding his small, fenced in garden while his dogs paraded outside it. He glanced over his shoulder at her, then looked away to ignore her some more.
“Rufus have you seen my Baby?” she called again.
“I don’t know who, or what, you’re talking about.” He yelled back without stopping from weeding.
“She’s black and white, looks like a mini cow!”
“No, I haven’t seen your damn cat!”
She sighed loudly and returned to her porch. This isn’t a big deal, she thought, Baby’s probably just exploring somewhere. Maybe she found a nice mouse or baby bird to play with. She’ll be back before nightfall.

When the clock next to Maggie’s bed flipped to 1 AM, she started crying. Baby had never been gone this long before. She leaned against the headboard of her oversized bed and tried to slow the tears. Midge and Rover were sleeping on her husband’s empty pillow, curled together in a fluffy lump. Casey, Dasher, and Buddy, the three calicos, were spread out at the end of her bed where her feet never quite reached. She got up and put on her bathrobe, then made her way to the kitchen in the dark. Zippy, the overweight tabby, was a blob in the sink that winked at her when she flipped the kitchen light on. “Sorry hun.” She smiled weakly, her eyes red and puffy, “have you seen Baby anywhere?” as if the cat could reply.
She made one more hopeful, yet ill fated sweep around the house. All she found was Flopsy and Cotton-Tail snuggled side by side on the overstuffed couch sans Mopsy. “Where’s your sister, you two?” she asked, but neither Flopsy nor Cotton-Tail even batted an eye.

The next morning, Maggie tried her best not to think about Baby. She went out to her flowerbed and started to yank out the scarce weeds. Boris came over and watched fixedly, but she lost his interest to the colorful butterfly that Greta was chasing. The two distracted Maggie from her worries when they started fighting over who got to play with the flying bug. She remembered what time it was when Oscar came over and gently clawed her leg.
“Time for breakfast isn’t it?” She smiled at the cat, then carefully pushed herself up from the ground.
“Maggie.” Rufus’ stern voice startled her. She jumped around nervously and saw him supported by the fence.
“Yes?” she tried to sound cheery, even though she knew he could see right through that.
“Two of my dogs didn’t come home last night. Have you seen them?”
She clapped the dirt off her hands, “No, Mr. Major, I’m sorry.”
He scoffed, “Well if you do, will you let me know?”
“Sure, and if you see Baby or Mopsy, will you let me know?”
He didn’t answer, just turned his back to her and walked towards his house. Now what’s the matter with him? She wondered. Did he already know that Mopsy had disappeared as well? She shook her head, that’s silly, why would he want her cats? She looked down at Oscar, who was waiting for her to head inside and open the cans of food. But as he purred for her, she didn’t really see him. Her eyes glossed over and she felt her mind go blank just as if she had flipped off a light switch.
She went to work in the kitchen. With hopes that Baby and Mopsy would be lured by the smell of food, she watched as only 9 cats showed up to the 13 bowls she had set out. “Where’s Flo and Selena?” she asked the hungry mass of furry backs and tails. She checked twice, but Flo’s orange tabby and Selena’s pure black backs weren’t there.

It was two nights later when Maggie was sitting up in bed again, worried about the now seven missing cats. In addition to Baby, Mopsy, Flo, and Selena, now Boris, Oscar, and Greta had gone missing as well. Rufus had come to the fence twice in the past two days, saying that a few more of his dogs had gone missing as well, but now Maggie wasn’t too sure she believed him. She couldn’t tell if any of his dogs were gone, it looked like the same number milling around when she looked at his back yard. She wasn’t too sure that he wouldn’t lie to her just to keep her from suspecting him.

The next morning, when Olivia and Andrew didn’t come for their breakfast, Maggie had had enough. She ripped the bulky metal pan from its hook and stormed out into her backyard in her bathrobe.
“Rufus! Rufus you come out here right now!” she yelled into his house from the fence.
He came out after a minute, then charged over to the fence waving his arms and ranting about something she couldn’t understand. He had a pooper scooper clutched in his hand, held like a rifle by his leg as he walked.
“Do you know how many of my dogs are missing?!?” He roared. She dug her toes into the dirt and clutched the fence with her free hand as he came closer. Before she could say anything or even think of anything to say, she saw his scooper rise from its place at his side and towards her head, as if in slow motion. At the same time her arm with the pan at the end of it came alive and aimed itself at Rufus’ own head with strength Maggie didn’t even know she had. The two of their weapons reached their respective destinations at the same time and a resounding crack reverberated through their yards and they both fell to the ground, limp, broken, and cold.

Across the street, the grey fluff ball that had once been named Andrew, sauntered over to an outstretched hand full of cat treats. The hand’s owner reached out and scooped the hissing feline into one of the metal cages in the back of the huge SPCA truck along with a crowd of howling and barking dogs. The woman shut the doors and walked around to the driver’s side as her partner went to the passenger side.
“I wonder why all these cats and dogs were around this one neighborhood?” Michael asked as he climbed into the truck next to Lacey.
She smirked, then turned on the van and drove away, “Probably just some breeding ground around here somewhere.”

In the back room at the city’s SPCA, every cage was either filled with a gloomy looking cat or a loudly barking dog. Their new name tags taped to the top of their cage, collars around their necks designating gender. Sure they had bowls of food and water, and would most definitely be adopted by wonderfully loving families with young kids and toys to play with, but who would they play with and control like they did with Maggie and Rufus?

Bassmama
11-30-04, 06:21PM
Excellent! I though something was coming out of the woods & getting them until I got to the end.

Marsbert
12-06-04, 09:26PM
Here's the revamped version I edited for my portfolio.....if anyone's interested ;)


Catnip

She sat on her back porch like she always did, rocking in that old creaking chair, waiting out the day. Hoping against hope that it would go by faster than it had the day before. She was the kind of elderly woman young children would point at the supermarket and scream, “Mommy! Look at that old lady!” She didn’t have any friends outside of her home, and she only left that flea-infested stink hole when there was absolutely no food for her cats anywhere. She couldn’t help herself, she loved cats. She loved their eyes, their meows, and the way they could take care of themselves, she identified with them in some ways. That’s why she had so many of them in the home she once shared with her husband and kids. Now that the kids had moved out, and her husband had been put in the ground years ago, her 15 cats were her family. She had been labeled the “crazy cat lady” after acquiring her eighth one. Now she didn’t hear the cute little toddlers who pointed and gawked at her ragged attire. She ignored the comments sneered by those she passed by about the “stench” that seem to trail her.
As she rocked, mind a blank to the beautiful day in front of her, she watched Mr. Bo Jangles and Olivia sniff an interesting spot of grass. Andrew and Boris started hissing at each other on the other side of the lawn and she launched out of that old rocking chair towards them. She was always surprised that her hips didn’t fall off when she did that. Being as old as she was, she took pride in the way she was still able to get around as easily as she could, and that she didn’t need anyone to take care of her. She sludged through the wet grass and bent down to scoop up the spitting Andrew. He continued to hiss, now directed at her, but she just hugged him tightly to her chest and turned back to the house. By the time she got back to the porch, he had stopped fighting and was just calmly leaning on her shoulder. She brought him inside and plopped him on the kitchen counter. She went to work, humming to herself as she rummaged through the fridge for ham and mayonnaise. Soon Mopsy and her sister Flopsy appeared next to Andrew on the counter, all very interested in the slices of ham that she was putting on her sandwich. “You already had breakfast, remember?” she cooed at the three of them. They didn’t look at her, their eyes fixed on the ham sitting helplessly between those slices of bread. She grabbed her sandwich before they could pounce on it, and left the hypnotized cats to go back out to the porch.
After a few minutes of enjoying her sandwich, she realized her lap was still cold and bare. “Baby?” she looked around. Baby had always popped onto her lap when she had a sandwich on the porch. It was their little routine. She scanned the backyard, but didn’t see her “mini cow” anywhere. She went inside and called for her oldest friend, then checked all the rooms, and even got down on her knees to peek under her oversized bed, but she couldn’t find Baby anywhere.
When she returned to the back porch, she didn’t notice that the ham between her bread was now missing and that the four cats that had been dozing out there were now suspiciously licking their chops. She looked out into the backyard once again, hoping she might see Baby trotting back to her, but she was disappointed yet again.

When the clock next to her bed flipped to 1 AM, she let the tears take over and course down her cheeks. Baby had never been gone this long before. She leaned against the headboard of her bed and tried to slow the tears. Olivia and Boris were sleeping on the empty pillow next to her, curled together in a fuzzy blob. Andrew, Oscar, and Mr. Bo Jangles, the three calicos, were spread out at the end of her bed where her feet never reached. When it felt like there were no more tears left inside her old eyes, she caught her breath and threw the covers off. She got up and put on her bathrobe, then made her way to the kitchen in the dark. Zippy, the overweight tabby, was a blob in the sink that winked at her when she flipped on the kitchen light. “Sorry hun',” she smiled weakly, her eyes still red and puffy, “have you seen Baby anywhere?” as if the cat could’ve replied.
She made one more hopeful -- yet ill-fated -- sweep around the house, but all she found was Flopsy and Cotton-Tail snuggled side by side on the overstuffed couch, sans Mopsy. “Where’s your sister, you two?” she asked, but neither Flopsy nor Cotton-Tail even batted an eye in her direction. She had paused a moment for an answer she just remembered she could never receive. She turned the living room light off again and returned to her bedroom to snuggle up with those cats that hadn’t gone missing.

The next morning, she tried her best not to think about Baby. She got dressed, put on her gardening gloves, and waltzed outside humming a tune she didn’t remember hearing before. She went to her flowerbed and started to tug out the few weeds that had grown. Boris strolled over and watched her fixedly, but she lost his interest to the colorful butterfly that Zippy had been chasing. The two of them distracted her from her worries while they started fought over who got to play with the flying bug. Oscar, the orange tabby, came over to where she was kneeling and gently clawed her leg. She laid a heavy hand on the cat’s head and rubbed him vigorously. “Time for breakfast isn’t it?” She smiled at him, realizing what she had forgotten to do when she had gotten up, then carefully pushed herself up from the ground.
She looked down at Oscar, who was waiting for her to turn towards the house and towards the kitchen where the cans of food taunted their feline eyes. But as he looked at her, purring, her eyes went blank and she stopped seeing him. She felt her mind go blank, just as if she had flipped off a light switch.
Once she snapped out of her trance, she trailed into the house and went to work in the kitchen. With hopes that Baby and Mopsy would be lured back home by the smell of food, she watched in horror as only 11 cats showed up to the 15 bowls she had set out. Her voice caught in her throat, “where’s Flo and Selena?” she gawked at the hungry mass of furry backs and tails. She checked again, but Flo’s orange tabby and Selena’s pure black backs weren’t there, in addition to Baby and Mopsy.

Two nights later she was sitting up in bed again, worrying about now 9 missing cats. She couldn’t help but let the tears stream down her face. In addition to Baby, Mopsy, Flo, and Selena, now Boris, Oscar, Buddy, Dasher, and Zippy had gone missing as well. She sat there in bed, visions of the morning that Boris & Zippy had been chasing the butterfly, and how cute they had been. She could count her remaining babies almost entirely on one hand now. She looked around her bedroom and counted Olivia, Andrew, Mr. Bo Jangles, and Greta, who all purred in their sleep as she sobbed around them. Then another thought came to her, where are Cotton-Tail and Flopsy? She could have sworn she just saw them. But she wasn’t sure. Maybe they had deserted her too.

The next morning when she woke up, Olivia and Andrew didn’t come for their breakfast. She staggered out of her bedroom past her last two cats, Greta and Mr. Bo Jangles, who were lying outside her door. She pulled her wool poncho half way on and once she opened the front door, Greta dashed out, without even saying good bye. “Don’t leave me!” she cried, then began the lengthy trek from her house at the end of the dead end road to Main Street where the nearest supermarket was. Inside, she knew she was wandering around aimlessly. She could see herself scaring the other customers as she teetered from one side of an aisle to the next. She felt like she was locked inside a glass cage but nobody could see her pounding or screaming to get out. She stopped at the pet food aisle and looked around for a moment, but she didn’t see the only brand her babies would eat. “Where are they?” she began to sob. She didn’t notice the man behind her stop what he was doing and gawk at her.
She almost choked on the fresh air when she stumbled out onto the sidewalk. She bumped into the arm of a tall, chunky man, but she only apologized with “she left me! They all did!” as she fluttered away.
She made it home safely, but as soon as she opened the front door she forgot why she was there. She had started crying before she had turned down her street, so by now her face was so swollen and runny, she could hardly catch her breath or see straight. Mr. Bo Jangles wandered into the living room just as she threw herself onto the couch. His cold, wet nose touched her outstretched hand and she screamed at the feel of it. He scampered away as she yelled after him, although from her glass cage she couldn’t even see him, “They all left me! Just go!” she burst into a fit of sobs.
Despite her tears, she managed to fade in and out of something resembling sleep. She decided that the bloated cushions in the couch were keeping her awake and that she should take something to help her sleep. She struggled to launch off the couch, but instead she bumbled to her feet and shuffled into the bathroom. She glanced into the mirror for a split second – wondering, for that same split second, who she was looking at – before ripping the cabinet open and finding that ancient prescription of sleeping pills that her husband had never finished.
After forgetting how many pills she had just swallowed, she fell back onto that horrid couch and nuzzled into the pillow. It was no comfort to her skipping visions of Baby sitting on her lap enjoying a sandwich with her, or of Flopsy, Mopsy, and Cotton-Tail curled together in a bundle, or of Zippy lounging in the sink.
Her last tear dangled perilously on the end of her nose for a brief moment as she suddenly came to realize that the whole world around her was moving in slow motion. Even her breathing has slowed, and her caged-self watched in a drugged stupor as that final tear fell from her nose and she closed her eyes forever.

Across the street, the calico fluff ball that had once been named Mr. Bo Jangles, sauntered over to an outstretched hand full of catnip. The hand’s owner reached out and scooped the growling feline into one of the metal cages in the back of a huge SPCA truck. That same hand shut the doors and walked around to the driver’s side as her partner went to the passenger side.
“I wonder why all these cats were down here at this dead end street?” Michael asked as he climbed into the truck next to Lacey.
She smirked, then turned on the truck and pulled out of their parking spot, “Probably just some breeding ground around here somewhere.”
“I hope they’re all alright.” He said in a muffled voice.
“Why wouldn’t they be?” her eyes darted at him, then back to the road.
“I don’t know, maybe they had little families here or something.”
“Maybe. But we’re doing everyone a favor. They’ll be better off this way. We aren’t hurting anyone.”