Reflection

[NikiLikeLicky]

Tonight I stood by the window and looked into the darkness.

The reflection of the woman's eyes were dark and full of sadness.

I watched her as her fingers touched the cold window pane.

I tried to hear her as she spoke so softly her lover's name.

I saw tears fall gentle and free.

I felt heart break the reflection was me.

[Diva]

That's beautiful, Niki.

[entipy]

Niki - I like this one! Very nice. :)

[Lilith]

Niki--you didn't specify if you want criticism or not, so I am not walking in with my arsenal and pulling your writing apart yet. :) Do let us know if you want it criticized (constructively).

Other than that--pretty words. I like it.

[NikiLikeLicky]

Feel free to speak your mind :d

[Diva]

Originally posted by Lilith
Niki--you didn't specify if you want criticism or not, so I am not walking in with my arsenal and pulling your writing apart yet. :) Do let us know if you want it criticized (constructively).

Other than that--pretty words. I like it.

I certainly hope you DONT have an arsenal....

Why cant people just enjoy someone's thoughts put into words without pulling it apart? My opinion is that if it were written differently... then it wouldnt be my words.

[Lilith]

WC and I critique each other's stuff all the time. I simply asked if Niki wants hers critiqued, or if it is to be just enjoyed.

[NikiLikeLicky]

Hey theres always room for improvment in the way one does things, so any help would not be looked down apon, the day someone thinks they know everything about something is the day they should be put down like an old dog....lol