And then the storm crept in...

[entipy]

And then the storm crept in . . .

Its feet became leaden and tramped ruthlessly
through the caverns and crevices,
leaving a trail of deeply engrained
and foul-smelling footsteps.

A sudden light broke a stone wall
and shone brightly from within the crack ---
which grew . . . widened . . . obtained more breadth
The echo of the forging terror resounded
and forbade obstruction.

A wail came . . . .

The defeat was simple.

The echoing recommenced.


1992 (?) - copyright JMI

[Lilith]

It's good but I have to think about it when not half-dead and miserable (as I am now). I'll get back to you about this. :)

[Jake]

Entipy, you are very talented. This poem was very powerful. I felt myself visualizing what you were describing. I look forward to reading more.

[entipy]

Thank you, Jake! :D

[Diva]

Oh my! I cant believe I missed this! It's wonderful, Entipy. The hair on the back of my neck started twitching. You are very talented. :)

[entipy]

:o

Y'all are too kind. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. :)

[Jake]

As Diva says: Just being honest. ;)

[entipy]

Y'all made my day!

(oh, and this is my 100th post!!)

[entipy]

I can't edit! Eek. I just saw a most embarrassing mistake. The second line should be "Its" instead of "It's."

[Diva]

I fixed it. You should still be able to edit. I'll check out the permissions when I get home.

Congrats on your 100th post!!!!

[entipy]

Ooh!! Thank you, Diva!

:kissy: